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9/24/2013

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I'd like to polish the soundtrack post. "More than you think you are"
yeah, it's long... But I poured a lot of myself in it. it would be nice to know if it was boring, or if i should cut a few things out, i don't know. I have problems with brevity.

But I still fell like I'm onto something there... something that's slipping from my grasp.

what'd you guys think?
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Angel
9/24/2013 02:15:40 am

I think that you already know that you have a problem with your brevity. It was very informative, however you should cut some things that you did know that you were repeating, and it makes it repetitive.

Ps: I lost myself trying to figure it out all your moves, and I kinda got lost on the reading process. I know it's not of my business, however I suggest that, if you are going to tell your story on it, you should be more clear explaining in your post to get your story right and clear.

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Frances
9/24/2013 02:35:30 am

Although you know that the article was a long one, it was very organized and well written.

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Jesse ^_^
9/24/2013 02:41:51 am

I think you should be more explicit. I got lost in some parts.
Other than that I think it was very organized and well written. :)

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